6 Responses to “An Earthquake is a Raging Rhino”
  1. cgreen says:

    Taylor you have made an effective comparison with a rhino. I really liked your choice of powerful verbs – destroyed and charging. Good use of sound repetition in words like tumbling and rumbling.

  2. Charlotte says:

    I really like your use of powerful words, it really emphasised the fact that an earthquake is a rampaging rhino. You have also made a very good comparison to the rhino. The only thing I personally think you should have changed was to not have the roar at the end. But other than that it was a great poem.

  3. Luis says:

    Good poem Taylor.
    I loved it. I thought it could be a little longer but apart from that it was brilliant! I also liked the rhino noise at the end.

  4. Temi says:

    I liked your poem it was very effective but you could have used repetition and rhymes.

  5. Edward says:

    I loved your poem Taylor and I think that your sounds were very good. 10 out of 10!

  6. williamg says:

    I liked how you told us what a rhino looks like and how he moves. The only thing to improve is the ending when you screamed. Bad for headphone users!

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